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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
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The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.(开头段落描述题干所讨论问题的普遍性。开头句式简短,不冗赘,一个复合句搞定。插入语的使用避免了题干的机械性重复, 同时保证了句子的连续性)中国雅思网a+v6W)ieU2aP

*RI(B5m)d0Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. (-ly副词开头主题段落一肯定第一个观点,表示作者本身的态度)(从句和被动语态的使用)So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.(模糊例证,支持上一句中的观点。从句的使用。连接词 so 的使用)
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However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. (转折词however,承接上文,引出第二个观点的支持论证)(词汇方面,innate, differentiate)(语法方面,完整复合句的使用)In other words, there is more to the skill than a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.(对于观点二的支持解释)(连词in other words的使用)
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Ca4s2QEy/J0I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. (表达自己对观点一的部分支持)(词汇方面, inherit)Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level.(解释论证,比较反差)(词汇方面,excel, comparable level) (结构方面,连接词 such 的使用)But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. (转折词but引出作者的观点:兼收并取)(词汇方面,nature versus nurture, mutually exclusive)Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. (用例证进一步解释“兼收并取”)(词汇,exceptional)Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent(假设例证支持自己观点。排比双重否定句强调肯定效果).(词汇方面,continuous, exploit)中国雅思网L'hD7/DV
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In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required. (个人表态支持两个观点的结合。插入语的使用。)中国雅思网$P^tGT W

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2. 文章连贯流利性:强调了文章 总分总和转折段落结构。强调了小连词的使用和ly副词的使用来表达作者态度的流动性
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